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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #15 on: January 31, 2009, 05:48:45 pm »
I read it.

Good thing I go to the site jsut to see if you forgot to update. :lol:

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #16 on: January 31, 2009, 06:44:50 pm »
Aw, I want to paint on Robo too! It would look a whole lot better than my current color theory homework...
So, just to get it straight: Schala and Janus had an uncle and cousin who got killed by the Queen, and Reiz somehow fell into a time gate? Confusing, but fun.

I'm excited to see how you handle the next few chapters, especially Magus and his three cronies. You can never go wrong in a story with Ozzie, Slash and Flea!

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #17 on: January 31, 2009, 07:01:56 pm »
Reiz's story isn't explained completely for awhile, she certainly has not told the whole story yet. So just hold on!

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #18 on: February 04, 2009, 11:19:51 am »
Because of some weird, cosmic pull of Fate, I actually had the chapter done last night... As soon as I went to post it, my power kicked out for about four hours. Gosh it was cold...

Added, now, an archive folder of chapters 0-17. Hurray hurray.

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #19 on: February 04, 2009, 01:36:07 pm »
Huh... New Party member to replace Alphonz. Interesting.

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #20 on: February 08, 2009, 01:42:28 am »
Overdue chapter is posted.

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #21 on: February 08, 2009, 03:36:48 am »
Very entertaining read, as always. I'd like to order a bottle of Eau de Lavos!

Just nitpicking, but sometimes it isn't clearly stated who is speaking, and it gets slightly confusing. Still, very nice story :D

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #22 on: February 08, 2009, 03:46:52 am »
Yeah... I just get tired of always adding '____ said.' after each phrase... I'll try to get better about it.

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #23 on: February 08, 2009, 01:58:20 pm »
If it's a short conversation between two people who have already been named, or if it's obvious who is speaking, you don't need to add '___ said'. It's for when someone new is speaking, or when someone is speaking out of turn.

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #24 on: February 08, 2009, 03:49:20 pm »
Yeah...
Half of my problem is that I'm writing at around midnight.
Brain no function at night. Like Ayla, head go BOOM!

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #25 on: February 08, 2009, 05:27:03 pm »
If anything, Do the lines like this.

[example]
Alphonz: MY LEIGE AND LORD HOLDS THE VOID!
[/example]

For those who don't have the chapter up, that was copied straight from Chapter 17, "La Nostra Riunione"


That reconverts all the dialog to the chat logs.
Chat logs are not allowed on FF.net
:picardno

Crap.
« Last Edit: February 08, 2009, 05:30:51 pm by Shadow D. Darkman »

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #26 on: February 08, 2009, 05:28:31 pm »
That reconverts all the dialog to the chat logs.
Chat logs are not allowed on FF.net
 :picardno

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #27 on: February 08, 2009, 10:56:23 pm »
Yoko Endovale here, with the latest news of Falling Star Perfume - The only fragrance with the essence of Lavos.
Getting the material for this stuff is really hard, but because of what a sudden smash hit it was, we've decided to run with the Falling Star brand of perfume! Our advertisers are already running aggressive campaigns to get it out to the public.




We've even got models endorsing it.



It's so popular, we've got a celebrity endorsement!!


You can pick up your own bottle at the price of 750 Gold, at finer retailers everywhere.
Remember: Look for Falling Star Brand and beware of imitations!

« Last Edit: February 08, 2009, 11:18:18 pm by Yoko Endovale »

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #28 on: February 09, 2009, 12:49:40 am »
That is just... wow. Yeah, now I REALLY want a bottle of that :lol:
Great poster art, too. Now if we could just figure out what Lavos smells like, you could really market that stuff.
But if it's the "essence of Lavos", does that mean we'll be completely and irreparably corrupted like Queen Zeal? Or would we just gain immortality? I guess immortality and corruption wouldn't be so bad, as long as we smelled great as a side effect :D

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Re: Chrono Trigger: Redreamt - Submission style.
« Reply #29 on: February 09, 2009, 01:20:01 am »
Please note that the ReDreamt corporation is not to be held responsible for reported cases of insanity, random bursts of laughter in inappropriate places, and feelings that you can travel time. These are totally not related to our product at all. Nope, no sir.