Author Topic: CT2:TE short story: Rise of the Fiendlady (Chapter 7 FINALLY RELEASED!)  (Read 3663 times)

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Re: CT2:TE short story: Rise of the Fiendlady (Chapter 7 FINALLY RELEASED!)
« Reply #15 on: February 17, 2017, 09:41:25 am »
The idea of this is really intriguing.  I know it's been forever since you've updated but I still like the idea.

The flow of the writing feels a little stiff, I think something contributing to that is spacing, where dialogue is crammed with small bits of narration.

I like that you give reason for Schala to ah, "turn dark" with the abuse she had faced, remembering bad memories, Janus getting killed, the temptation of power.