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Dream Splash V - Middle Ages [2012] / Re: Crono Returns Chapter 8 preview (Previous knowledge of CR NOT required!)
« on: January 22, 2013, 09:36:22 am »Quote
I guess everyone is their own worst critic.Truth be told, this is why I haven't been updating In Search of the Past at FFnet.
I have sworn enemies in writing: description, pacing, and prepositions. They make me skeptical with the quality of my recent writing.Anyway, if I may be really long-winded in reviewing this time!
Magus is evil here. Really, so evil when dealing with the Prince of Guardia. He is fitting as a villain-who-needs-a-punch-on-the-face IMO. So arrogant to the Prince and later saying that he wants to try out the new spell that turns someone into a frog. Characterization is clear there!
I pity the Prince as nobody believed him. His own family wanted him to be dead, which wasn't good for him anymore.
Also, the Frog King seemed to be manipulative and vengeful later on. But I think it's just fitting; getting hunted down just because of different looks, it was just right. I can feel the annoyance when someone 'judges a book by its cover'.
The conversation during the confrontation with Frog King is realistic in terms of battle speech. Taunting each other and asking for a deal (or ransom) are what that really strong here, so excellent job there!
Again, it seems like Glenn still can't trust the Frog King, while actually he is speaking the truth. The last part is moving. It just immediately brought me to FMAB Roy crying in Hughes' funeral (although here is clearly different from it, but the friendship between Glenn and Cyrus is like Roy and Hughes).
There's just a few typos (misspellings) in this flashback, which can be easily spotted by a reread or using a spellcheck. One concrit I can offer is, while I feel sympathetic to the Frog King by his back story, you can further strengthen this 'sympathetic' feeling by adding the Frog King's emotion at the moment the King and Queen rejected him. Maybe add some Frog King's internal thoughts at that part?
There's just an odd feeling when Glenn was able to bury Cyrus. I just wonder how can Glenn carry Cyrus' corpse while dealing with the Frog King. Maybe he returned to the spot where Cyrus died after running away from Frog King?
All in all, I thoroughly enjoy this and thanks for posting the preview!
I'll probably leave a longer review at FFnet once you post the entire chapter there.
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Fan Fiction / Guile Fanfics
« on: January 19, 2013, 12:50:52 pm »
Exploiting the fact that Guile is lacking of real back story (if we disregard all the speculations)... 
Sometimes I feel that it's enjoyable to write Guile fanfics because he is just half-developed in the game. There are references regarding his past, but never revealed completely. While for many other half-developed (or perhaps underdeveloped) characters, their accents just distract me, such as Zoah's caps lock accent, Greco's Spanish accent, Sneff's too many 'f' accent, etc...
'Doctor' Guile:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8824118/1/Curiosity
'Flawed Magician' Guile:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8761068/1/Flaws
More will be coming soon, including some old works which will be reposted in the future.
Feedbacks are welcome.
Sometimes I feel that it's enjoyable to write Guile fanfics because he is just half-developed in the game. There are references regarding his past, but never revealed completely. While for many other half-developed (or perhaps underdeveloped) characters, their accents just distract me, such as Zoah's caps lock accent, Greco's Spanish accent, Sneff's too many 'f' accent, etc...
'Doctor' Guile:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8824118/1/Curiosity
'Flawed Magician' Guile:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8761068/1/Flaws
More will be coming soon, including some old works which will be reposted in the future.
Feedbacks are welcome.
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Dream Splash V - Middle Ages [2012] / Bereavement - A String of Haikus
« on: January 11, 2013, 06:33:54 am »
Hello, everybody.
I have written a string of haikus about Frog mourning over Cyrus' death.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8897230/1/Bereavement
Feedbacks are welcome!
I have written a string of haikus about Frog mourning over Cyrus' death.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/8897230/1/Bereavement
Feedbacks are welcome!
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Chrono / Gameplay Casual Discussion / Re: Who would you cast in a Chrono Trigger anime?
« on: January 07, 2013, 11:20:21 pm »
I think Sonny Strait (Maes Hughes in FMA) is fitting for Cyrus. For Queen Zeal, I just think that she is a bit like Lust, so Laura Bailey may be fitting.
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Dream Splash V - Middle Ages [2012] / Re: Dream Splash V!
« on: January 06, 2013, 02:17:27 am »
I'll probably write a drabble, a string of haikus, or a sonnet about Frog or Cyrus for this, though not sure yet.
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Fan Fiction / Re: Crono Returns- MY sequel to the ultimate video game masterpiece
« on: December 28, 2012, 09:23:49 am »
Glad to hear about that! Looking forward to the next chapter!
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Chrono / Gameplay Casual Discussion / Re: Grim/dark CT fanfic I found
« on: November 26, 2012, 09:50:14 am »Quote
I'd also like to point out that Chapter 7 is almost done.Looking forward to it!
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Welcome / Birthday / Seeya! Forum / Re: Welcome, welcome!
« on: September 23, 2012, 01:11:22 am »
Hello, everyone. I joined the forum yesterday and just found this topic.
I recently replayed CT and CC so I decided to write a fanfic, which I have posted the link at another thread.
Looking forward to knowing everybody here!
I recently replayed CT and CC so I decided to write a fanfic, which I have posted the link at another thread.
Looking forward to knowing everybody here!
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