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LordBlumiere

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Chrono-based poetry
« on: February 28, 2010, 11:45:09 pm »
So, I write a lot of poetic fanfiction. I think I prefer it to story-based fanfiction as I'm horrible at writing setting for others' characters and I always feel I'll end up Sue-ing someone :picardno

In any case, I've done a couple Chrono Trigger poems lately, so I thought I'd post them here. I'd love any suggestions as to how to improve.

Only You

Ah, if only to go back to those days
Bliss of blue
Floating high above without care
To go back to the place I was born in
A place I didn't have to...

Didn't have to show a snarl
Didn't have to spit and growl
Snark a facade
For what really lies inside

Ah, if only to go back to you
Blissful blue
Singing to me while stroking my hair
To go back to the place where I sinned
The place where I left you...

Didn't have to scream "You fools!"
Didn't have to follow my own rule
Smirk a facade
For what really lies inside

Ah, if only to leave this place
Cursed and blue
Joining with them so I might dare
To go back to the place where it all begins
So it will again be two...

Didn't have to turn away
Didn't have to hide my face
Tears, no facade
For what really lies inside

I don't care about them
I only want to be with you
I don't care about them
I only want to be with you
I don't care
I only want
I don't care about them
Sister, I only want you

1999 AD

Combination
Saturation
You had it coming
Violation

Subjugation
Moderation
Through the eyes of
Modern nation

Choose you, use you
Trust me, open your eyes and see
Open your eyes and you better
Goddamn well see!

You had it coming
Inside was growing
Starting, shocking
Never hoping
Break your eyes and
Shut the glass
Fire's raining
Don't look back
Can't change your past

Flagellation
Altercation
Scream and see your
Immolation

Burn and die

You had it coming
Inside was growing
Starting, shocking
Never hoping
Break your eyes and
Shut the glass
Fire's raining
Don't look back
Can't change your past

Don't go back
Can't change your past
End of time
And end of life
End of youth
End of screams
End of your world
Corruption, self-destruction

You had it coming
Inside was growing
Starting, shocking
Never hoping
Break your eyes and
Shut the glass
Fire's raining
Don't look back
Can't change your past

These can also be found on my DeviantArt, http://lordblumiere.deviantart.com.

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Re: Chrono-based poetry
« Reply #1 on: March 06, 2010, 01:40:31 am »
Fascinating! It's been a long time since I've last written a poetry (I wrote about Schala once here somewhere around, but I forgot). I suppose this is a modern styled one, but it seems more like a wonderful piece of lyrics for a song to me than a poetry (I've always liked William Blake styled poetry).

You might still need to feel the art of word-craft though.

Quote from: Yours
Don't go back
Can't change your past
End of time
And end of life
End of youth
End of screams
End of your world
Corruption, self-destruction

Quote from: My suggestion
There's no way back
Can't change what's done
Witness the end,
of time and life,
of hope and pride,
of love inside;
Scream for your world
as it fades away
Corrupted and destroyed
before your eyes

Hmm, damn, I must be getting rusty...